Dagmar, a young elven princess, accompanies her father on a voyage to a dark and dangerous world in the hopes of preventing war from breaking out between her people and the dark elves of Svartálfheimr, but the peace is broken when the elven chief is murdered. Dagmar, the only survivor of the massacre, is now stranded in a world full of enemies. Vowing vengeance for her father’s killer, she flees to the neighbouring kingdom and places her life in the hands of the most fearsome dark elf ever known. Bound by an oath to the dark side and seduced by the dark elven king, bloodthirsty Svartálfar will turn an innocent girl into a cold blooded killer who will stop at nothing to have her revenge, but will she lose herself to the darkness as each step she takes carries her ever further from home and the girl she once was, or will she become the light amidst the shadows?

So, what do you think of my series and book title and pitch? Does it leave you wanting more? Are you desperate to read my book? If not, tell me why.

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18 thoughts on “Twilight of Yggdrasil – The Dark Realm, Book 1

  1. I just love dark gothic vampiric heroines. There is something about the way their eyes glow when they look at you and lick their fangs. I get all giddy thinking about it. I think you’ve done an excellent job. Now, tell me more, more, more more, I want to know more. Guess I’ll have to buy the book. 🤩

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    1. You dork! You’ve read the book! You’re help in me edit the book! 😂 But poor Dagmar will never have fangs. Dark elves aren’t like vampires, who bite you and turn you into one of them. Nope, they just drink your blood and five on the energy of their victims. 😉

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  2. Definitely want to read more, although after reading your post link from yesterday (point 6) I wonder if this is too wordy and that you could say more in this space?
    With my feminist head on I’m a bit gutted that she is passively turned into a killer by Svartalfr rather than transforming herself under his guidance. And really pickily I think she’s seeking vengeance for her father’s death or on his killer rather than for his killer.
    I love the title, it throws you straight into the Norse mythology whilst clearly not being a straight up myth interpretation. From your pitch I might go for Into the Dark Realm though to give a sense of her journey into the dark rather than being about the realm itself (that may be totally inappropriate as obviously I can only begin to guess at the rest of the story)
    Is it normal convention to call a book ‘book 1’ before you’ve written book 2 (I only seem to by series’s after they’re finished so no idea) but it might make the lingering question at the end of the pitch a bit redundant (as knowing already there’s a sequel I kind of assume the good guys win enough to keep going).
    I haven’t written a book so not done a pitch for one either so I’m slightly hating how picky this sounds, but I assume that you wanted suggestions as well as confidence boosters so hoping this is ok?

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